Another month, another bit of professional feedback, this time from a British production company, Hurricane Films. So, let's have a gander, hmm?
The story is very intriguing and uses both the genre types well, also
the idea of a animated crime story is interesting. The pilot gives us
enough information to want to watch the series to learn more about the
Angel and the Plague Doctor. However some of the conclusions the
characters come to are a bit out of the blue as we don not spend much
time with 'evidence. Some of the dialogue was a little cheesy and some
parts of the story were predictable. this pilot is effective in not
giving away to much to begin with and seems like the story would develop
as the series continues, but you should be careful to keep some
simplicity as it would be easy for this script to become confusing.
Hope this is helpful to you.
Naturally, will keep this on mind as I continue with the process of rewrites. Who knows? Maybe it won't be long before we're on a roll again...